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hmmwrites (Heather's version)
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In response L.E Gray ⚓ to their Spout
It can be so hard to find people who are willing and able to give real, solid critiques. I wish you luck!
01:30 AM - Feb 21, 2024
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Roxxy Riot:
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Art museum trip 🖤

I like weird things... lol
01:20 PM - Feb 18, 2024
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Christopher Bouzy
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Tomorrow I turn 48.🙃
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Paul Semel
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Started reading Alice James' "Grave Danger: The Lavington Windsor Mysteries."
https://amzn.to/3uuzuXO
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Really liked the first book in this cozy #UrbanFantasy #horror series, and so far, this seems like it's going to be just as much fun. #books #reading
02:22 AM - Feb 12, 2024
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Sherry denBoer
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In response L.E Gray ⚓ to their Spout
My two cents: :)

Her small head pops up and down…

The perspective is clear without ‘I see her…’ and is supported later in the sentence with ‘I know…’

As the writer, the decision is yours to make. For me, dropping unnecessary words almost always makes the prose better.
10:06 AM - Feb 08, 2024
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Erik Buchanan
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In response L.E Gray ⚓ to their Spout
Fair. The Qs I would ask (and it's for you to decide) are: if we know who's narrating, do you need "I see" for the reader to have that visual, and is the sentence more powerful with or without it?

Like I said, style choice.

And now, I have to get writing or I won't get anything done. Good luck!
10:05 AM - Feb 06, 2024
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Erik Buchanan
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For me, if the narrator seeing it causes an emotional or physical reaction, it's useful:

"He sees her head nod and his horror rises. He grabs it before it falls off."

"Her head nods and his horror rises. He grabs it before it can fall off."

I will look at both and pick the stronger one.
09:15 AM - Feb 06, 2024
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Erik Buchanan
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It's a style choice. I eliminate them because I feel it makes the action more immediate. We already know who is seeing it.

For me, when in doubt, take it out, check it out, and if it doesn't work, put it back in,

But as I said, that's a style choice.
07:15 AM - Feb 06, 2024
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Paul Semel
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Started reading Cedar Sigo's "All This Time: Poems."
https://amzn.to/3S31fQO
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Third book of his I've read (and the most recent) and it's starting out as strong as the others. #books #reading #poems #poetry
01:30 AM - Jan 30, 2024
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Jenny S
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Personally I'd be flattered, thinking you valued my feedback. I don't know the site, though.
12:49 AM - Jan 26, 2024
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#Rest
The quintessential healer.
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12:24 AM - Jan 23, 2024
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hmmwrites (Heather's version)
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That sounds more like a novella?
01:25 AM - Jan 22, 2024
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Jenny S
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I hate the state of my house. Why then don't I do something about it? Good question. Being a human is so annoying.
05:00 PM - Jan 20, 2024
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Verbalize
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"Who’s Who in Your Publishing Village" by Sarah Penner via WriterUnboxed #amwriting #writerslife #WritingCommunity #writingadvice #writingtips https://writerunboxed.com/...
07:30 AM - Jan 18, 2024
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Haruka
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There’s a new prompt up over at @Spoutories - Have fun!
#Writing #WritingCommunity #Writers #WritingGames
08:36 AM - Jan 18, 2024
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Rob Bignell
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12:27 PM - Jan 18, 2024
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Rob Bignell
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A website is the hub where readers can go to find out about your books, a little about you, where to find you on social media, how to contact you, and more. So how can an author build one? #writingcommunity #authorlife #writerslife #amwriting
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02:19 PM - Jan 18, 2024
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Geannie Bastian
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So I had to try my hand at an action figure of me. She’s a bit different from the others, but I kinda love her.
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Derek Croucher
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Everyone should always keep a raisin pocket.
April Sparkles @April_Sparkles
Thank you Derek! My team is looking amazing! Love the little raisin pockets. 🥹💛🤩
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Rob Bignell
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Read aBannedBook
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Just 2 more days until the #SpoutibleBannedBookClub discussion of The House on #MangoStreet on Saturday, January 20, 2024. Please join us! Discussers and supporters both welcome! #SBBC
Spoutible Banned Book Club @BannedBookClub
#SpoutibleBannedBookClub Discussion Guidelines
The House on Mango Street by Sandra Cisneros
#MangoStreet discussion begins Saturday 1/20/23 (12:01 AM US EST)

I will spout at least 10 optional talking points Saturday with hashtag #MangoStreetTalkingPoint

Echoes pls! #SBBC
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Jeannie (she/her)
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My job involves reviewing organizations that manage Social Security benefits for people. I go all over the state.
Yesterday, while in Streator, IL, I learned it's the birthplace of Clarence E Mulford, creator of Hopalong Cassidy.
This is the kind of random shit I live for.
10:13 AM - Jan 18, 2024
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Roxxy Riot:
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Roxxy's cemetery adventure 🖤
Pt. 1
11:07 AM - Jan 16, 2024
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Roxxy's cemetery adventure 🖤
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Roxxy Riot: @RoxxyRiot
Roxxy's cemetery adventure 🖤
Pt. 1
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Matlock
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Roxxy Riot:
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My school has an official DnD club, maybe I'll actually have friends soon..
That'd be crazy lol
02:31 AM - Jan 06, 2024
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Milo Velimirović
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Try cleaning the structures with boiling water. You may gain some insights
08:28 AM - Jan 02, 2024
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IMO
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In response L.E Gray ⚓ to their Spout
Please.
02:24 AM - Dec 30, 2023
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April Sparkles
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This snow bunny took a wrong turn on our #hike and ended up on a quest for some maple syrup! 💛
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09:29 AM - Dec 28, 2023
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