Brett Stauffer
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The cat stares at nothing
Does she see the eternal Dao?
I, alas, cannot

#haiku
09:51 AM - Jun 22, 2023
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Jake Wasserman
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Is your poem in fact
not actually haiku
intentionally?

Stirring, the cat notes
one thing at last eternal
Not the Tao? Not now?

Staring at the cat
I see nothing eternal
Alas, she does

The way the cat sees
is not the way to see her
or to see the way.
In response to Brett Stauffer.
10:04 AM - Jun 22, 2023
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Brett Stauffer
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In response to Jake Wasserman.
Haiku is 5-7-5 only in middle school English class. In the real world it is free-form.
11:50 AM - Jun 22, 2023
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Jake Wasserman
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In response to Brett Stauffer.
Do you have any
citation to back up those
eyebrow raising claims?

English syllables
certainly don't exactly match
the Japanese "on,"

& there is more than
one way to spread seventeen
out across three lines;

is that all the weight
your blithe admonishment
swings toward my cheek?
10:30 AM - Jun 23, 2023
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