Brett Stauffer
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The cat stares at nothing
Does she see the eternal Dao?
I, alas, cannot

#haiku
09:51 AM - Jun 22, 2023
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Jake Wasserman
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In response to Brett Stauffer.
Is your poem in fact
not actually haiku
intentionally?

Stirring, the cat notes
one thing at last eternal
Not the Tao? Not now?

Staring at the cat
I see nothing eternal
Alas, she does

The way the cat sees
is not the way to see her
or to see the way.
10:04 AM - Jun 22, 2023
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Brett Stauffer
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Haiku is 5-7-5 only in middle school English class. In the real world it is free-form.
In response to Jake Wasserman.
11:50 AM - Jun 22, 2023
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Jake Wasserman
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In response to Brett Stauffer.
Do you have any
citation to back up those
eyebrow raising claims?

English syllables
certainly don't exactly match
the Japanese "on,"

& there is more than
one way to spread seventeen
out across three lines;

is that all the weight
your blithe admonishment
swings toward my cheek?
10:30 AM - Jun 23, 2023
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